Strengths

Lots of ideas for my practical
development
The Structure of my essay is quite good
Evidence is shown throughout my essay work




Weakness
Confused about the topic and the theme
lack of references or quotations from the text
Better clarification , and specific examples with evidence
grammatical errors
 conclusion is simplistic, repetitive, and lacks closing statement 


Opportunities
Better Time management 
improve essay writing 
I will try to focus on my practical